23 Comments

  1. rarasaur
    November 4, 2015 @ 10:20 pm

    Terrible and frightening and oh-so-wondrously written. <3

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    • Cheney
      November 4, 2015 @ 10:25 pm

      Thank youuuuu. I rewrote it like four times before it got so sinister.

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  2. Thain in Vain
    November 4, 2015 @ 10:35 pm

    I totally dig this story!! Nice work!! TiV

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  3. SuperStarNat
    November 4, 2015 @ 11:08 pm

    Wow! That got so real so quickly… Not what I was expecting from the title but I love it!!!

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    • Cheney
      November 4, 2015 @ 11:09 pm

      Muhahahaaa.. Thanks 😉

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  4. c2avilez
    November 4, 2015 @ 11:34 pm

    Whoa! Not where I thought that was going. Nice job. 🙂

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    • Cheney
      November 4, 2015 @ 11:35 pm

      Thanks, I love that comment. Good to know I can surprise people!

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  5. anusrini20
    November 5, 2015 @ 12:47 am

    Scary!!

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  6. Donna-Louise Bishop
    November 5, 2015 @ 5:58 am

    Oh creepy! Great take on the prompt.

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  7. theinnerzone
    November 5, 2015 @ 6:32 am

    That ending was a complete surprise. Great take. ***

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    • Cheney
      November 5, 2015 @ 7:48 am

      Yay, thank you!

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  8. Michaela Mitchell
    November 5, 2015 @ 6:36 am

    Whoa…creepy and terrifying!

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    • Cheney
      November 5, 2015 @ 7:48 am

      🙂 that’s exactly what I was going for! Thanks!

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  9. NotAPunkRocker
    November 5, 2015 @ 9:16 am

    All bases are covered then, huh? Very good and chilling!

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    • Cheney
      November 5, 2015 @ 9:18 am

      Let the torture and killing begin! Wow. I’m sick. But it’s okay cause I’m A WRITER WRITING THINGS!!!

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  10. Porscha Coleman
    November 5, 2015 @ 11:23 am

    Nail biting. Brilliantly written.

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    • Cheney
      November 5, 2015 @ 11:31 am

      Brilliantly! Thank you!!

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  11. charlotte833
    November 5, 2015 @ 9:37 pm

    Creepy. Great writing!

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    • Cheney
      November 5, 2015 @ 9:54 pm

      Thanks & thanks for commenting!

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  12. livebysurprise
    November 7, 2015 @ 7:54 am

    That’s horrifying. I love it!

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