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  1. Doobster418
    March 18, 2015 @ 12:15 am

    Well told story.

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    • Cheney
      March 18, 2015 @ 12:18 am

      Thank you! That’s exactly what I want to hear since its starts right in the middle of something with a wide open ending 🙂

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      • Doobster418
        March 18, 2015 @ 12:20 am

        And the dialogue sounds genuine. Nicely done.

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  2. moonbear42
    March 18, 2015 @ 2:54 pm

    Nice take on the prompt!

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  3. innatejames
    March 19, 2015 @ 1:12 pm

    I like the Christmas touches you sprinkled through here. I could add it to the dread behind your plot; or I could add it to the innocence Evan seems to have for the situation he finds himself in. Have you read (or seen) “Gone Girl”, btw?

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    • Cheney
      March 19, 2015 @ 1:15 pm

      Oh yea. This is an addition to a series of flash fiction pieces I’ve done in the past around a certain theme. I plan on adding them all to the blog soon. Gone Girl pisses me off because I had my idea and started writing this BEFORE Gone Girl came out.

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  4. innatejames
    March 19, 2015 @ 1:15 pm

    By “dread behind your plot” I mean the gloomy winter and the absence of a loved one he’ll be facing in a few days.

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  5. Michael
    March 19, 2015 @ 4:26 pm

    Very nice. And I liked the dialogue as well. Of course, now I’m wondering what did happen to her…

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    • Cheney
      March 20, 2015 @ 9:51 am

      To be honest, I’m still wondering where Hannah went myself.

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