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  1. Shailaja/ The Moving Quill
    September 2, 2015 @ 11:15 pm

    Oh gosh! I was shivering as I read through this piece. You have some very vivid descriptions in there and it really brought the scene alive for me. Kind of reminded me of the sequences from the movie, ‘Life of Pi’ and how he is compelled to kill in order to stay alive. Survival really is of the fittest, isn’t it?

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    • Cheney
      September 3, 2015 @ 7:13 am

      I haven’t seen that movie or read the book, but thanks for the compliment! I know I personally would have to be painfully starved to kill something to eat. I’m way too .. Industrialized.

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  2. DragonSpark
    September 3, 2015 @ 5:16 am

    Nice one. The bit about the seagull was well executed. Cheers.

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    • Cheney
      September 3, 2015 @ 7:12 am

      Thank you 😉 I was in a pretty dark mood.

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  3. Michael
    September 3, 2015 @ 11:29 am

    Now that’s how to do a post-apocalyptic story. I felt sorry for the poor bird, but I could understand the character’s desperation. Ye gods.

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    • Cheney
      September 3, 2015 @ 11:44 am

      Thanks! Yeah, you can’t feel TOO bad for the gull. I feel more bad that she had such guilt about it.

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      • Michael
        September 3, 2015 @ 11:47 am

        I have to admit, I don’t think I could kill and eat a seabird, but then I’ve not been in a situation where I might need to. So, I’m not gonna judge. 🙂

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        • Cheney
          September 3, 2015 @ 11:48 am

          Exactly. I don’t think I could either.. But would I? Probably, if it came down to that or wanting to chew off my own arm or leg to keep from starving. Ever read Stephen King’s short story, Survivor Type? 😉

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  4. innatejames
    September 3, 2015 @ 4:24 pm

    My favorite moment: “When I lay down at night, my stomach makes a bowl and my ribcage makes a piano, my bones and flesh the keys to some secret I’ve never known.” These two sentences tell me everything I need to know about the narrator. Even her body is an abstract idea.

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    • Cheney
      September 3, 2015 @ 9:38 pm

      That’s a great, insightful comment, Nate! Thanks for taking the time to read this!

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